What I have heard is so cliche,
but it doesn't dim what i have to say.
what doesn't kill you makes you stronger
May be true but could we have lasted longer?
I've heard people say
"Looks can be deceiving."
and sadly it's true
but you didn't hurt me by cheating.
Lies cant hurt
if they are used for good.
but how you deceived me,
i never dreamed you would.
say hello to goodbye
becasue you broke me more than once.
i knmow that repeating "why"
will just have me wondering for months:
What did i do?
Was i not good enough?
But does it really matter now?
You've just made my edges rough.
Your moss green eyes
caused me to fall too hard.
I'm probably no the first
so why do i feel like an utter retard?
Say hello to goodbye
because this time it's for real.
But what makes this even worse,
is i cant help what i feel.
I loved you once before
and it was a love
true to my very core.
when i met your first,
I fell too hard,
but I know now, deep down,
that you're the retard.
But for now I will mourn
and nurse my fresh wounds,
along with my heart
that wont heal at all soon.
Say hello to goodbye,
for I am leaving you behind.
And a part of me will still love you
for making me stronger in heart and mind.
but it doesn't dim what i have to say.
what doesn't kill you makes you stronger
May be true but could we have lasted longer?
I've heard people say
"Looks can be deceiving."
and sadly it's true
but you didn't hurt me by cheating.
Lies cant hurt
if they are used for good.
but how you deceived me,
i never dreamed you would.
say hello to goodbye
becasue you broke me more than once.
i knmow that repeating "why"
will just have me wondering for months:
What did i do?
Was i not good enough?
But does it really matter now?
You've just made my edges rough.
Your moss green eyes
caused me to fall too hard.
I'm probably no the first
so why do i feel like an utter retard?
Say hello to goodbye
because this time it's for real.
But what makes this even worse,
is i cant help what i feel.
I loved you once before
and it was a love
true to my very core.
when i met your first,
I fell too hard,
but I know now, deep down,
that you're the retard.
But for now I will mourn
and nurse my fresh wounds,
along with my heart
that wont heal at all soon.
Say hello to goodbye,
for I am leaving you behind.
And a part of me will still love you
for making me stronger in heart and mind.
I like the meaning behind this poem and it flows very well, leading into the next thought without feeling too blocky. This has nothing to do with the poem, but the grammatical errors were a little distracting, but considering how most of your other poems aren't like that, I'm assuming it was just a lack of time. I think that this one would be easier to read if you just fixed the little distracting errors. But overall, a very good poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks for all the comments. I really appreciate the fact that you took the time to read them. It means a lot to me. And yes, you are correct, I had little time to type them all out so there were bound to be grammatical errors! But, thanks for pointing that out because otherwise I would not have noticed!
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