Slowly, I start off...
gradually increasing my pace.
I run.
I feel the wind at my back
gently urging me on.
Soon, I tire
but I don't stop.
I run.
I feel the stitch in my side
as well as the
pounding of my heart..
...the roaring in my ears...
.....the sweat on my skin....
I run.
I feel the grass tickling my bare feet
and the cool breeze on my face.
The wind caresses my hot skin
ever so gently but still:
I run.
The wind, the grass, the sun
all combine together
to calm me, but still:
I run.
gradually increasing my pace.
I run.
I feel the wind at my back
gently urging me on.
Soon, I tire
but I don't stop.
I run.
I feel the stitch in my side
as well as the
pounding of my heart..
...the roaring in my ears...
.....the sweat on my skin....
I run.
I feel the grass tickling my bare feet
and the cool breeze on my face.
The wind caresses my hot skin
ever so gently but still:
I run.
The wind, the grass, the sun
all combine together
to calm me, but still:
I run.
This poem is written nicely and creates very detailed imagery through the lines. My only concern is formatting because if I hadn't tried to look, I wouldn't have seen the "I run" in yellow at the end. The lime green is a little hard to see as well with the white background. It's okay to use colors for emphasis, but make sure that they are still visible against the background.
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